by seyifunmio

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‘Please, open your ears. Open your heart. Hear my voice. We all need love. I do not speak much. Only a few words. Only a few ‘

The rain was a remnant of the past. The past that had been buried in the Mercedes. The past that was made in the white Mercedes. The past that had been myopic of the future. The cats were a remnant of the olden days. The olden days so cold and lonely. The olden days so bleak and sad. The mosquitoes were a remnant of a childhood. A childhood so loveless and eventful. A childhood that shaped and moulded. A childhood so depressing. The rain, the cats and the mosquitoes were elements of a time without love. A time so sad. A time so dull. The rain, the cats and the mosquitoes.

– SoulFullOfSeyi.

10 thoughts on “Untitled.”

  1. For some time i thought You had quit writing. Thank God I was wrong. You do this thing amazingly and effortlessly. Much love babes

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  2. Hi SoulFulOfSeyi, this here is a pretty decent write-up. All your emotions while writing it was felt. But, I have an issue with an element used in the article because it was a little bit unrelatable. The rain, the cat and the mosquitoes all have a sad vibe to it but it was a bit difficult for me to relate to the car(i.e the white Mercedes). So bring us closer to it and tell us how you feel, it may be difficult to express it but getting it right is what makes you soul full of Seyi. Great work.

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  3. Your choice of words, so inventive yet so precise. The entire piece centered around a feeling of sadness,a sadness linked to the past, a sadness caused by the absence of love- this was sad.
    The rain and the Mercedes I’m guessing relate to a point in the past where things were good but judging from the end tone that moment appears to be shortlived.

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